New SEO starting out...first attempts! Plz plz critic/review =)

[Vir0n]

Hey there, just new to the forums, read most of this forum since hmm....12 today and its now 16:53 =) that will tell you how intrested i am in the forum. You guys definitly have alot of good stuff to say, and im impressed with SEO Guy and his site!
I have made the relevant changes to the site and i was just wondering how the site rates in your eyes, and if any suggestions.
The website is
www.axiossystems.com

There is also another site, remedy.com who seem to have a much higher page rank than us and are in the same area, i also have a question on that because if you search link:www.remedy.com (http://www.google.com/search?hl=en&ie=UTF-8&q=link%3Awww.remedy.com&btnG=Google+Search), it will bring back a huge number of internal links...eg their /products or /customers and they all do have high page ranks, i was wondering if a: their internal pages since they are indexed in the links by google, if they have any relevance to their main index pagerank, and b: how this is possible that they have SO many links from their internal pages and we only have a few even tho the pages are 5+ PR for our site. Any suggestions on both subjects would be greatly appreciated :))

Many thanks

[Vir0n]

oops, got carried away with the post i forgot to add the keywords :eyes: :D

they are:

ITIL, Axios Systems, assyst, it service management, IT Service management software, Axios, Help Desk, Service Management Software, help desk software, ITSM

[dilligaf]

Viron, here ya go. I was gonna wait and see others comments but...
I don't think the bot is getting through your menu at all. If it were those internal pages would show as BL's (like your comopetitors). If you check your site map (from a text link) they're all there. You may want to work up a couple of variations of footer text links to your main internal pages (variations to not be so spammy and include some anchors) to get those IBL's. It'd be a great test of the IBL's strength if you didn't mess around with too much else.

There are a couple of oyher things you may want to look at but IMO this should be resolved first.

But then again, I could be wrong.

[Vir0n]

excuse my ignorance but what is an IBL? and thanks for your advice regarding the menus, it will be changed!! :D
Any other suggestions would be greatly appreciated!!

[seo guy]

An IBL is a backlink or more specifically an In Bound Link http://www.seo-guy.com/seo-glossary/seo-i.html for any references to acronyms or definitions

[Vir0n]

:O:O:O Seo guy msgd on my page :O lol =)

What did you think of the page oh wise seo guy =)